Escape Artist 
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 It has been quite a while since I have read this chapter. In fact, I have read this one, and one or two more that I have yet to review. I can't remember what got in the way and kept me from writing those reviews, but I am just now getting back to the story. Before I came across this today, I read another item for review and the title when I came across it kept nagging at me. The first time I read it, I thought, "Wait, this isn't the author of the story I was reading." I had to check it out to make sure, but as it turned out, it was a total different piece of writing, but it put me back on track with you and getting back to reading your wonderful book.
 I have noticed that there is a great image and quote with the beginning of each chapter and anyone paying attention to detail will come to the conclusion that the image and quote are much like a foretelling of what is to come.
 I remember reading this the first time and wondering how you were going to get around the security to get the Frankenphone and pistol to Merci. There had to be a way, and you figured out exactly how in such a way that it wasn't just a quick fix the reader could see through, it actually was used as a great prop to further help show and develop the characters involved, Simene and Rho.
 I don't know why I must ask, but I am going to. What did Merci end up doing with the cookies? Did she eat them on the plane when they were fresh? Did she nibble on the cookies while watching the DVD? I don't remember if she eats them later, I might just have to wait and see.
 I have only noticed one technical issue with the story and that is listed here below. Other than this one small item, all other grammar, spelling and punctuation appear in order to me. That is not to say I haven't missed anything, but nothing else stood out.
~ to get too to the drifting craft, they become close friends.
My favorite part of this chapter:
She dozed, waking only once after standing on a forest path that forked in two directions, one up a steep mountain slope and the other down to a shimmering sea. She dozed again, took the fork leading up the mountain, and walked toward an uncertain destiny.
To me this is very prophetic and happens to many people without them realizing this. It fits well within the story and stands out as the turning point that it is.
With the swift boat memory and Simene's presentation now showing relevance to each other and giving life to the images, Merci is now armed with a bit of knowledge that may protect her down the line. At least now she knows what she is or might be dealing with, if she were to come into contact with this island and the inhabitants 
My overall thoughts:Overall, I am very enthralled in the story and find it hard to believe that I had put it down for so long before returning to it. I am anxious to find out the mystery behind the events and the characters involvement. This is a vital chapter in the story. It accomplishes several things.
~We get the full background on the island, and are introduced to two new characters, who will, I am sure, will be key components to unraveling the events as they unfold.
~We learn of how highly guarded the island is and the involvement of the government to hide or secure information from the public.
~Rho and Merci's actions together further establish their bond and show the day to day interaction they have before they are thrown into any real drama that may be to come. We see their hot burning flames quenched followed by an ease and relaxation as the two await for the final boarding call.
~We see more of Simene's character as he shows compassion with Manny and includes him in the surprise of the delivery by including the special cookies with signature stamp.
I feel that with the ending, we have reached a turning point and the action is about to begin. We the reader now have the back story and the characters, now we will be launched into the action, discovery and revelation of what is to come. Once you take that path, there is no going back. (unless of course, after this story is all over, you are able to end it with a flashback to my favorite part in this chapter where Merci has the two paths to choose from and this one takes her to the sea. What different outcome would have, could have, been the result...thought I would just throw that idea out there  )
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A well written piece that is foretelling the cycle of how tragedy is often known to strike in a pattern of three. This lyrical piece is well written and is riddled with dismay and grief. The emotional upheaval is felt with each line. 
Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.
I only noticed on technical issue to point out:
from me was that this was a writing assignment and you took the time to include the assignment so that others were aware of the parameters placed upon the writing. 
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