If we don't keep it real, we are living a life of lies; which might seem like fun for a while, but what do you do when it all catches up with you. What then? Where do you turn to try and continue on? You don't! Your past life of lies will be like a shadow. It will follow you and haunt you until you die. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Hooray for you! If you had decided other than you did, I might not have been able to enjoy reading this wonderful piece, and others like it. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Some women will do they to a guy. Don't you just hate when that happens? I do. LOL Oh well. Life still goes on. Thank you for reminding...I mean sharing this. LOL wrdz
If you don't feel, you will eventually die, for we must feel in order to continue on in life. This piece is apparently "on the money" about how you feel, but that feeling should be changed to a more positive feeling. I hope you have much to look forward to in the future. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Such a peaceful, calm poem. No need to use this, but I found some spots that just don't seem right to me.
There are more than just one song, so in stanza two, third line, I'd put "beautiful songs of Peace" there.
And in line four, same stanza, you have more than one heart, so I would say "The hopes burn bright in each of those hearts." Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
May I sugest that you use some sort of punctuation throughout the entire piece? I found it hard to figure out where one sentence began, and ended, and the next one started. What you have to say makes sence, but it needs some work in the punctuation department. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
I take it you are from England (With a train bound for London and all). I'm over the ocean in America, Iowa, Winterset. The birthplace of "The Duke" (John Wayne). I like this piece as I can visualize many of the things you describe here in this piece. I try to find wrdz in a piece that I don't know the definitions of. That way I try to increase my vocabulary. This piece seems to carry well, I think. I liked reading it. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
You might be surprised at what the "repercussions might end up as. You have to be brave, and take what is given, for we know not what is in the head of another. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Superb!! The only thing keeping this from a 5 rating is the fact it was all in CAPS. Are we a first time writer also? (Besides a 1st time mama?) Keep it up. Don't stop. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
That only means you are one of the lucky droplets that didn't get swallowed up by larger drops. God has more in store for you. Welcome to WDC. Keep on writing. Don't stop now, 'cause now your part of the "family".
Please! continue on. Thank you for sharing your first piece. wrdz
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