Your strong determination will carry you far. May God continue to go with you on your quest. For only with Him will you be victorious. Your friend through Christ Jesus, John (wrdz)
You say that people reluctantly dance to the tune of destiny (?) What does this part of this work mean when at the end, you say that people SHOULD dance to the tune of destiny when their tune arrives? Are you saying that people dance to the tune of destiny reluctanly because they are dancing before their tune arrives for them? And how are people to know when their tune arrives? I'm not trying to trick you or anything, just understand some things that may help me out later. God's blessings to you. wrdz
Talk about tough love! This is excellent. I enjoyed reading this as it is a reminder of just how really tough some of us have it in life. Once again, excellent writing. We need more of this type of writing to keep us reminded of the true meaning of "tough love". Thank you for sharing this superb writing. wrdz
A very nice tribute. May God ccontinue to bring you a steadfast hope. Your wrdz were continually eurging me to read on more. I enjoyed reading this work. Nice job. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
We will never be able to fill the shoes of others, nor will others be able to fill our shoes. This is a well worded work. One that puts you in a thinking mode, as most works should do. Very well done here. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
This work deserves the best anyone can give it. Excellent job on this work. Don't stop. Your doing too good to quit now. Thank you for sharing this work. wrdz
Very deep thought. We need more of this at times. You have given me the thought to be reminded of that idea. I extend to you my thanks for being my "conscience" to keep me in check on that. Thank you very much for sharing this work. wrdz
Nicely done work. I am moved to believe that the "you" in this work refers to God. If so, that is refreshing to know that young people are not shy about self expression of their religious beliefs. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Well done. Daddies are real softies when it comes to the needs of children. Good job with this work. I found no corrections or errors. I enjoyed this work as it held me to the end. No wanting to wander off to other things. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Body:
Further examples of hands exercises that are sometimes overlooked.
Closure:
Best example of all. We are constantly being used as the best examples of uncaring acts of those who have no thought about the actions of their hands. I give this a two thumbs up
Beginning:
This work opens like a true dedication.
Body:
The rest depicts a sentiment of respect, and admiration.
Closure:
This is a work of dedication, love, respect, and many other emotions all dealing with poetry. (My works are under "Quotaions of the Heart" in my port if you care to have a look see some time.) Well done. I give it two thumbs up.
Beginning:
This work begins in such a fashion as to make one wonder where it will be going.
Body:
It is not until your last paragraph that you actually get to the nuts and bolts of what you really want to say. The prior paragraphs lead in to the direction of what you want to say, but are a ways away from it I think.
Closure:
Once you get to what you want to convey to the reader, it is well said. You give examples of ways in which one can appreciate the end product by what needs to take place to get to the point of being able to have the piece necessary to work with. This gives a sense of appreciation for the piece itself. Therefore, one who possesses a work, must remember what was done in order to have the final product. I give this work two thumbs up.
Beginning:
Makes one wonder what lies ahead in this work.
Body:
From the second stanza on, the story unfolds.
Closure:
I the end, a child is made happy. As happy as they will ever know happiness. If that could also apply to adults as well as sick children, what kind of world do you imagine we would be living in? (Wishful dreaming, I know. But....) I give this three thumbs up! Super work, meg.
Beginning:
Knowing this deals with innocence makes it all the harder to let someone know that you "understand". Even having gone through the same type of situation still does not justify "knowing" how someone feels. Each situation is unique and individual to each person.
Body:
Explanation of feelings cannot be truly expressed. It runs deeper than that, and cannot be comprehended, unless experienced. Your work is good. And I'm sure expressed to the best of your ability, but there are feelings there that just simply defy explanation.
Closure:
I'm sure that from heaven, one can clearly see the true expression of love for a loved one "lost". They have been found and shall be reunited when God feels the time is right to do so.
Closure:
We can only imagine the truth of the situations over there, but you have given a fitting tribute to what they are going through. Only in actual death can one tell what the hell is really like.
Why? is an infinitive question. That's like trying to figure out where a circle begins and where it ends. After two months in a round room, I showed the doctor where the corner is, and I swore him to secrecy as to where it's at. Good work with this. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Beginning:
First two lines give me pause to wonder.
Body:
Last two lines of first stanza finish the opening statement. The second stanza brings out a 180 of the first stanza, showing that somewhere along the line, a total change has taken place. For the positive.
Closure:
Some of us are lucky enough to wittness first hand, such a change in a life turned over to Christ.
Beginning:
The first four lines set a stage that holds you for what is to come.
Body:
The heart of this work is continuing in a state of frenzy and chaos in ones mind.
Closure:
Final four lines tell of the inevitable final event in everyone's life. Pretty scary to think about, but it must be known and accepted as what is a reality. Nice job with this work. I enjoyed reading it.
Body:
Brings to mind a certain little lady who now has a new addition to her family flock. What's her name again? Oh! It's got to be none other than the very happy MEG!
Closure:
I enjoyed this work. I got a sense after the first line, but I don't know how many know you yet, but I'm proud to know you. Keep up the good work. Thanks, meg.
Beginning: Your beginning makes one wonder who is speaking. That brings enough curiousity to want to find out more.
Body: Your body is an explanation of various examples of life. They give the bad, and how the bad gives you first hand knowledge to use to give to others.
Closure: You now know that there is an answer to be able to be healed.
Beginning:
Such a sweet announcement of a new life to this world. Placed in your families tender care.
Body:
Telling of the birth and all the pride that goes along with that wonderful moment.
Closure:
A gift from God, and she's yours. Makes you want to follow all His requests from now on. Many happy congradulations to you and your family, meg. God be with you, and Rebecca Jane as well. Always.
Beginning:
The first two lines make one think what it might be.
Body:
Not much there for a body, but it says what is the problem.
Closure:
Things a clarified in the last line. We sometimes don't really care for who we are, and want to take the simplest way to get away from it, but there is no simple way to do that. We must change ourselves in order to get away from ourselves.
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