There is a lot of agony here. You must not concentrate so much on agony as on the goodness of life. There are many things of goodness. Concentrate on finding the goodness and you will start to see a big difference. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Whether you know it or not, you fight whether you want to or not. Each day is a new day, with a new set of problems for you to tackle. You take on these problems and give it your all to fight to win over as many as you can every day. So, with God's help, and your own will to continue on, you do your best each day. God bless. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
I have a saying I came up with that goes something like this: There is no shame in truthfulnes and honesty. Only freedom for your soul. Thank you for sharing this well thought out piece. wrdz
Nice to see that things worked out so well. They paid attention, not just to each other, but to their relationship as well. Nicely written piece. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
This entire piece is good at all points numbered. Your descriptions of feelings after the change in atmosphere are all good. and giving the ending a sadness that expresses how you feel about the atmospheric change. I think you have "captured" it quit well. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Very moving and realistic. The realism comes from facing the fact that he knew he couldn't save them all, and the fact that everyone has to die someday. This might be a coping mechanism to help keep one's sanity in tact. Otherwise you could find yourself showing some doctor where he hides the corner in the round room. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Sounds like you came across someone who was not ready for what you set before them. And now that the reality of their reaction has set in, you find out too late, that your presentation should have waited for a better time. Sometimes it's not too late though. If you are willing to "back away a bit", maybe the person on the recieving end will see your efforts, and be willing to take things a little slower, giving you a second chance. I hope it will work out for you. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Reality is sometimes more than some can actually accept, so a ficticious sense of being takes over covering up the actuall reality. Making things more bareable, and comprehendable to our feeble minds (that includes my feeble mind, too). We have to learn to know when something is not being accepted by our mind, and accept the unreal sense of being, because in order to see some things as they really are, would make us go insane - perminantly. Accept some of the ficticious
things in life knowing it is a replacement for a reality of uncomprehendable proportions. Then let it go, and move on to something else. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Being redeemed feels good, doesn't it? You will carry that feeling with you for eternity. God will make sure of that. Thank you for sharing this well written piece. wrdz
Nice way to say that there is nothing of a worldly sense, that will be there when all is said and done. Only God. He is all that will be before us when we really have a serious need. (or what we think of as
a serious need. For He is the only serious need we will ever have. A very well written piece. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
I gave this a low rating because first of all, the entire thing is in capitals. Capitals are for two things. Starting a sentence, and if you want someone to think you are raising your voice to a very loud SHOUT. Next, I sugest you go back through it and make your spelling corrections by using a spellcheecker, or the old fashioned way, with a dictionary. I will help out by pointing out your spelling mishaps.
Next to the last line, you have "Strong and brave they fight for out (should be our) freedom"
Next you have what appears to be a double to a part of a sentence in lines five and six. You have "Why must these poor men we send (line six) We send them to the depths of the earth" I don't follow this part at all. You need to correct and clarify this part. Thank you for sharing this. It will be a beautiful piece when it is finished. I, too, have a piece in my portfolio you might want to read. It, too, deals with our soldiers, but during the Viet Nam War aera. Feel free to look it over if you wish. Thank you, again for sharing this piece. wrdz
It is that good. It is sad, but at the same time, it is good (writing wise) You deserve a score like this just for having the guts to describe and write about what happens far more often than it should. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
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