Sounds to me like confusion also adds to the uncertainty of this situation. I found myself becoming confused the more I read. I don't know the in's and out's of it, so why wouldn't I get or be confused by this. Thank you for sharing this.
Can I at least try to understand? That is what helps to bring peace and harmony to this world that God gave us - Understanding. If we understand, we can accept better, the differences that make each of us what we are. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
In line seven, you have "well create a masterpiece of art" I think you might have meant "we(')ll create a masterpiece of art. Good work otherwise. Nice job. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Very good! I could almost feel certain things in this piece. We need more of this type of thing in the "real world". We also need someone for everyone to be able to experience this type of thing. Thank you so much for sharing this. wrdz
You are right. We can learn everything there is to know about our life, as well as everyone elses' lives, and everything about this entire universe, but the very last thing we learn, is how to die. Obviously, we will all get that right on the first try. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Very well said. My rule of thumb is "It's not so important WHO says WHAT, but rather WHAT is being SAID." It may sound confusing at first, but once you reread it a few times, It starts to make some sense. I base my writing on this as a way of trying to do good when I write, but after seeing what is here on this site, my stuff seems almost too embarrassing to display here, so I save myself that embarrassment, and stick to reading and reviewing. Thak you for sharing this. wrdz
The last stanza, second line has no connection for me. The last stanza has you saying "Believe in yourself and follow your own destiny.
(This is where I get lost)
Make sure not to let the ones you care about so deeply.
(What about the ones you care so deeply?)
Drop the ones who fake completely."
It seems to be a good piece overall, but I just can't seem to get past that one incomplete line. Maybe it's just me (?). Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
I believe dreams are inspired of God not mans' thoughts. God's inspirations are very real (as you say "reality beyond conception"). A rather deep piece of writing. Not bad. Keep it up. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
A way to find out answers to questions you are not sure about. Sounds like a lack of communication, or an insecurity of some kind. You at least deserve answers. Thank you for sharing a nicely done piece. wrdz
A loss can never be felt unless you are personally involved. If you have never been in that position, you can never express the wrdz needed to be expressed. You can not know the agony and frustration one has to endure because of a loss. The closer one is to those who are lost, the more intense the feeling of that loss. May I simply say "I'm sorry for your loss." God will find a way to fill the void you now feel (when the time is right).
So very true. I found a few errors in spelling and some capitalizations that were missed. ANY reference to God is capitalized (He, Him, His, Son, I'm sure you have been writing long enough to know these things, but they are easily overlooked). You might want to edit this piece. It is too good a piece not to. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
Sounds like the natural order of life. (Regardless what type of being it is, it is still life, and having that idea in mind, it is to be respected as such.) We pay our respects to the variety of life. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
There were a couple of places where you neglected to capitalize the "H" on He making reference to God. Any reference to God is always capitalized. I really like this piece. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
But eventually, you will let go of those things and begin to move upward and onward. You have to, or you will find yourself in an unfamiliar time. One that has no begining, and no ending. I hope you will chose to let go. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
A very nicely written tribute. Another good person (although he doesn't sing) is John "The Duke" Wayne. I happen to live in the town where he was born (Winterset, Iowa). There are other good inspirations like these two,but that would be another whole poem. Thank you for sharing this piece. wrdz
Good job. Well written. Children have a different way of looking at things that gives them a special advantage to making new friends. We as grown ups seem to forget, and "lose" that advantage. I say "lose" because we will always have it, but we forget how to use it. Thank you for sharing this. wrdz
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