I really like your poem here - it's a nice tribute to Buffalo Soldiers which is the featured video at the Veterans Group this month. Well done! If anything - I think "soldies" should be "soldiers," if you'd like to fix it.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem was a respectful tribute for those who have passed away in war. The use of Flanders Field and poppy seeds stirs up images of World War I.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the compare/contrast of the battlefield to be followed by flowers.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it red. It made the poem easier to read on the website.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: Along with crimson poppies, military cemeteries appeared," This is a striking visual - where poppies mark a battlefield and a cemeteries and it stirs a sense of gratitude for those who sacrificed.
All four of my daughters were vets from the moment of birth. They were all born while I was on Active Duty, were born in Army hospitals, and bounced back and forth between the U.S. and West Germany with their mom and me (the eldest ones more than once).
Ouch. Too real for me today. I was homeless years ago and Montana has a high vet population struggling with personal issues. This literally could be today's headlines here.
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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
WHAT I LIKED
