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30 Day Image Contest

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Rated: GC · Book · Contest Entry · #2046748

My book for the 30 Day Image Prompt Contest

Hmm, let's see how this goes...

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Cinn

Aug 1, 2015 at 2:38pm
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Love it. Some of it sounds familiar. It's similar to some of your other work as far as the phrasing goes, but who cares?

That last line is beautiful too.

Elle

Jul 28, 2015 at 6:37pm
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He chewed tobacco until it chewed back. There's an image I won't get out of my head in a hurry!

Charlie ~

Jul 22, 2015 at 7:44pm
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Crossfaded! Yes.. We were drinking, but for sure coulda been huffing too.

I'm glad you like this one. I'll have you edit some stuff after the contest ends anyway. I need to add some to my poetry folder.

Cinn

Jul 21, 2015 at 3:41pm
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I haven't heard the term 'crossfaded' in years. Ah, nostalgia!

So, the brown paper bag... booze or huffing? Considering the rest of the poem, it definitely seems like... huffing. Just curious about the intention.

Lightning and ribs... both featured heavily in one of my recent poems too. Strange that they seem to go so well together.

Anyway, I think this is one of the best in the contest so far. Love the first stanza... the whole narrative is really solid... the imagery is off-kilter awesome. The "i know i can trust them to do their best at chipping away" is a bit verbose, but that's the only criticism I have. Tighten the last lines after the contest and it will just be gold, man.

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Cinn

Jul 20, 2015 at 3:41pm
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Aaaaw... sad and dark but written in a sweet nostalgic tone. Not a favorite, but I dig it.

Cinn

Jul 19, 2015 at 7:03pm
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I thought maybe you had something else in mind, actually. That's just... how it read to me. Clearly, the emotion can across just fine because that's what I got out of it too.

I definitely have those moments where if anyone speaks to me, looks at me, or touches me, I feel like ripping their face off.

It just... happens sometimes.

Charlie ~

Jul 19, 2015 at 6:18pm
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Exactly. I knew you'd get it.

Cinn

Jul 19, 2015 at 6:16pm
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Teddy bear gore is superior to all other forms. Yeah, man... chew that bear's face right off. Love it! Honestly, pretty amazing description of those 'everything is technically fine, but I'm agitated so fuck off" moments.

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Cinn

Jul 18, 2015 at 12:22am
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Sorta hard to ease into "Then he twisted the head off a live chicken". Just saying.

Charlie ~

Jul 18, 2015 at 12:16am
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I was probably easing into the story. Don't wanna be super gross about it at first.

And yeah, I'm still horrified.

July 21, 2015 at 8:46am

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Day 20 - Cool Kids

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The older kids are cool and offer
tidbits of advice, like:
don't get struck by lightning
because when it hits, it cracks your
ribs, splitting them open and exposing
your organs to all the elements
they're meant to protect, like
thunder shaking the ground and
jumbling them all together in
a gruesome blender.

From the top of the church steps,
I can see where they end in a shroud
of eerie fog and say something like:
"I'm at the top of the world."
And they all exchange glances and laugh
about how crossfaded I am as they pass
me back the brown paper bag and lean
against the cold stone pillars.

The smoke trails from our cigarettes
collide midair in a dangerous dance
and my new friends show me how to
inhale proper so it burns my lungs
optimally until I look at them with
dark eyes that beg:
please just horrify me,
and I know I can trust them to do
their best at chipping away what's
left of my innocence.

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