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THE STORY
A solider lays flags on graves.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the emotional sentiment behind the man laying flags on the graves.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the 3rd person omniscent. Past tense is used in the story.
DIALOGUE
There is an internal dialogue which accents emotional points.
OPENING PARAGRAPH
The opening paragraph sets the stage for the flag placement. There's a sense of duty, but there's also underlying emotional beat that the reader will soon discover.
CHARACTERS
The man placing the flags finds a deeper meaning to the gesture of placing flags on military graves.
Dragons to classes
Not a word
Different shapes and sizes
They can all fly
Dragons to classes
Obsidian waits outside
I put on my backpack
Ready for the ride
Obsidian is young
An adult dragon watches
I'm smaller than him
He can lift heavier objects
I go on his back
He gleefully lifts off
Off to classes I go
A short ride in the air
Prompt:
49. Imagine what it would be like to live in a world where instead of taking the school bus, you ride a dragon to classes!
Line Count: 16
Word Count: 65
Activity: "The North Remembers"
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