Erotica Harem

Title of Story: Zoe’s Return

Chapter #: 2

Author: Pat

Setting: Hollywood post-premiere party

Characters: Zoe and Kevin (main characters)

Referencing: Good – Zoe’s hostility toward the partygoers nicely portrayed

Plot: Zoe giving in and heating up

Grammar: No issues

General:
“Pressure” building!

“His hands slid down her ass, cupped her ass, and pressed her into his heavy arousal.”
Suggestion:
“He slide his hands down her back and cupped her ass, pressing her into his heavy arousal.”

“She tugged firmly on her hand but he only smiled and slowly released her… “ Adverb alert!

“I’ve got a tone of work waiting for me.”




Keiko Alvarez – The Japanese Cowgirl Author of Erotica and Slightly Dark Goddess
http://www.keikoalvarez.com
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