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Jan 24, 2011 at 6:29pm
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Redundant language problem - need help
by ~Jack Author IconMail Icon
I am working on a story told from the 1st person perspective of a teenager. Two of the other primary characters are his parents.

I am constantly using the terms "my mother" "my father" to the point that it does not look or sound good. I think it would be out of character for him to use his parents first names and I want to keep the story in 1st-person.

One problem I am having is that much of the story takes place in the presence of other people (there is a small group in a conference room) so simply using the pronouns he or she will often be unclear.

If anyone has any ideas or suggestions it would be greatly appreciated.
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Redundant language problem - need help · 01-24-11 6:29pm
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