The announcer's voice bobbed in a wash of static, "It is estimated that almost half the country is now out of shhhhhhh is in sight and shhhhhhhh begin to feel shhhhh ..."
The announcer's voice bobbed in a wash of static, "It is estimated that almost half the country is now out of ... is in sight and ... begin to feel ..."
I think the first example is how i'd write it if i wanted the static incorporated in the dialogue. The ellipses in the second example give *me* the impression the announcer has a neurological problem, not a signal to noise issue.
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