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SOARING PACKAGE REVIEW


Changing my format for reviews.
DISCLAIMER: This comes to you as a reader would see your work. I have only my opinion to offer. Sometimes I might find a bit of your work I thought that I might express feelings about. If it struck a cord etc. If there should be such an entry under 'EMOTIONAL CORD STRUCK' that is just my feelings and not meant to hurt or take liberty with the authors work.


TITLE: Fits the content well.


IMAGERY: Good and vivid. A little girl is teased constantly by a family friends child. The boy is really mean on this trip to the Grand Canyon. He probably didnt really be as awful as he was but he tricked her into a cave and left her there. She was so frightened and outside was a thunderstorm. The lightning strikes would flssh against the walls of the cave and make things worse. She began to pray. She needed Jesus to help her be safe again. This small child knew Jesus would listen to her small voice. Even through the thunder and noise outside. Soon her parents found her. Safe now and resting in the hotel but knowing Jesus was there for her.



EMOTIONAL CORD STRUCK: Turning to Jesus for help.



TONE: Good depth of feelings. Fear is felt. Confidence in her faith even though a small child.


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SPELLING ERRORS: care of Robert called her a baby,


FLOW: Flow is good. The word choice is good


OVERALL: Good read. Please keep sharing.

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