** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Please feel free to use or discard any of my suggestions Dear Karen: Well, I feel a bit odd reviewing a piece of yours in light of who you are and what you do for New Horizons Academy, but curiosity got the better of me, and I loved this scary poem with an inspirational twist. Written in the first person, the poem describes a walk through a forest at night on a well lit path. As clouds move in, the path is obscured, birds take flight, and uncontrollable fear sets in. The imagery was spooky and well described. The fear was also well outlined and palpable. Apparently the danger or unseen threat was mortal, but the walker 'hears' a voice inside him/her that confirms death is near. I thought that your use of punctuation was superb, and your spelling perfect, but I did see one spot near the beginning that raised a question: " like goblins on All Hallowed's eve. " - - - - this line made me pause, so I looked up "Hallowed" and found that it of course means 'sacred' or 'revered', and there was no link to Halloween in the definition. However, under "Halloween", there is a reference to "All Hallow even", so I think what you meant was: 'All Hallow's eve' . And on a spiritual note, I recall a few passages in the Bible that make it clear that no human can see the face of God, and live. However, since, in this case, the subject will already be deceased at that point, I guess it's possible, who knows? Thank you for sharing your poetic talent with this community. I loved the ending, it was a nice, positive twist. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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