Dear Lolita-New Book! :

I'm very glad that I found this outstanding Earth Day poem! At the very beginning, the rhythm is sharp and snappy, and the rhyming scheme of a/b/c/b is consistent and pretty good.

Each stanza either describes mankind's pollution of the earth, or relates what we can do about it. Nice!

I thought your spelling was perfect, and your use of punctuation all throughout the poem was superb. This sounded very good when read aloud. However, when I arrived at the final stanza, I had a problem with the rhyming lines there:

"Turn off your unused lights;
pull out your electrical cords.
Earth day is upon us,
let there be no more discord. " - - - Now, I counted the syllables in most of the other stanzas, and all seemed just right. But here, the rhythm of the rhyming lines seemed off, plus using "discords" to rhyme with "cords" seemed pretty rough. The line ending with "cords" has eight syllables, but the line that rhymes with it has only 7 syllables. This throws off the rhythm just enough to be noticeable.

Otherwise, I thought this to an outstanding and exemplary Earth Day poem! Thank you for sharing your talent with this community.