Hi KBowyer !

I found your poem on the Noticing Newbies page and thought I'd take a look, so here are my thoughts.

VOICE, TONE, DICTION:

The voice was third person, and the tone was soft. The diction was standard.

SOUND PATTERNS:

The rhyming scheme is ABABCDCD.

IMAGERY:

Mountains, valleys, smile and a heart.

LINE STRUCTURE: LINE BREAKS, METER, REPETITION:

The lines had punctuation to break them. The meter was uniform in the pattern it followed.

ERRORS:

None found.

SUGGESTIONS:

I might add some more action or imagery to the piece to lengthen the story.

FAVORITE LINES:

"Mountains high or valleys steep,
He wouldn't let them be apart."

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

This was a nice ode to love and relationships. The structure was good and the formatting was good. Nice job.

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, and keep writing!