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General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem about a lot of ifs. I guess we all have this once in a while, what if I had something, how would I do things differently? And each of those ifs are about the stuff that we don't have and want to have in our life's and the fact that we are will to do something good when those if's come true. I like your second stanza about living forever, I've never given much thought about living forever, logically any human would stand a maximum of 100 years and a minimum of 60 years if there are no other causes for an early death. So the thought of living forever gives me some relief that may I've got time. I like the last stanza the most, romantic and true words from your heart. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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