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General Comments and Emotional Impact

A free form poem about calling for your muse and the questions you ask to your future muse. I have to say you've taken a lot into account about your muse. Although you wrote in the end that you haven;t found your muse, I most certainly think you have. Word choice and flow are good. No mistakes in spellings. Well written.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and that is what lead me to read your poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

In the first stanza,
Third line, you could use a comma to separate far and far. So the line would be like this... "...galaxies from far, far away..."
Fourth line should end with a period and you have used a comma, so you should correct that.
In the fourth stanza, last line, you wrote, "Never forgetting to tell you (fill in the blank) how special they are." should it be, "how special you are", just a little confused here. Although this is correct if you are talking about the imperfections and blemishes.
The last stanza, last line, you wrote "I just hadn't met you yet, my muse." which should be, "I just haven't met you yet, my muse."

These are just my friendly suggestions.

My Favourite Lines

"Putting myself out there, my writings into another's hands, seen with another set of eyes,
Praising the great and good and softening the criticism of the not as good."
This is the way to growth and learning.

Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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