Hi D.W !

I found your story on the Noticing Newbies page and thought I'd take a look. Here are my thoughts.

Characters:

A girl or woman, who is unnamed.

Plot:

There is no clearly defined plot.

Setting:

I believe it's in the forest or in the woods.

Narration: Voice, Tone, Exposition, Metaphors/Similes, Basic Storytelling and Diction:

The voice is third person, and the tone is mysterious. The exposition is good, and the diction is great.

Dialogue:

There was no dialogue.

Beginning and Ending:

The beginning sentence started off the story a bit slow, as it didn't move into action until the last sentence in the story. The ending was interesting.

Errors:

No spelling/grammar errors found.

Suggestions:

I'd name the character, put another character in there with her so that there can be some dialogue between them, and define exactly where this forest is (country/state?). Spice up the beginning with action, and improve upon the plot line by making this story a little longer since it was rather short.

Summary:

This needs some work, but I can see a promising story here behind what needs the work.

Thanks for sharing your talent, and keep writing!