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 | I have a thought...  [E] A few thoughts on today.  |
| (2.5)| Greetings! The following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item. Welcome to WDC by "Newbie Welcome Wagon" PLOT AND FORMAT: At a glance, I know right away if it is appealing on the page and is easy to read and understand. If it is in one huge paragraph, it becomes too difficult to read. Make use of white space between paragraphs and character dialogue.The format of your short article was good and as this was only a few lines, it was easy to read. SETTING: This is important. A nice balance of imagery and well written word makes me feel as if I am there, but overdone it ends up being repetitive and redundant. The setting here, this is a realistic article of political views of Syria and Iran. LENGTH: If the piece is overly long, then I am more reluctant to read it, but if it's intriguing, I still might. The length of your article was short and I was here when I saw your article in the Newbie's Worklist page. GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: While punctuation errors can make a piece impossible to read, often I can pass over them, depending on what it is, and noting where and what so the writer can go back and revise them. It is often something easily fixed. The red phrases are from your story whereas the green text is my personal opinion. There were none that I could find. However I think that those who do not know about this would love to hear more and as this is your own thought, you should mention more so that reader's will be attracted into reading it. I myself was interested in knowing more of what you think. DIALOGUE: I love dialogue. I take note if it has any or if it has the character's thoughts. N/A POINT OF VIEW: I must know who's point of view we are in. The transition was good and easily understand. FLOW: The story must not only be told in a logical order, but must have a feel to it. That means I 'm not stopping and starting abruptly, or stumbling over the words or distanced for some other reason. The flow of your article was good though it was really small. MY FAVORITE PART/THING ABOUT YOUR STORY: The thing I liked about your article was that you mentioned something that should be noticed and thought about. This is thought provoking. Even though I do not like Political issues, this kind of news and activities should be questioned and taken in consideration. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK! Write On!  Have a nice day/night! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** "Invalid Item" |"Invalid Item" |"Invalid Item" |"Invalid Item" |"Invalid Item"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/03/2013 @ 10:28am EDT