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 Ewww, I Love Magic Open in new Window. [GC]
Created for the "Parlor Magic" round for the one-and-only Weekly Quickie Contest
by Jakrebs Author Icon
Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: GC | (4.0)
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Review of Exwwww, I Love Magic

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Your story covered the magic prompt quite well. It goes into depth with the tricks and then into the greater depths of trying greater magic. It seems that this magic gets a little out of hand when the characters start to morph into something else. I am not sure if the mirror is magic or the magic comes from the two characters.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

You carry out the erotic activities while keeping the idea of magic in open view in the story. Well done. The two characters are well presented even if they change during the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I wish this story was not for the quickie so you could go into more detail.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest.

dblameck
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