Hello there leonightfire! Indelible Ink here, with a review of your work. This is just my opinion, be it right or wrong, and you are free to take as much - or as little - as you'd like from my comments.

1) Overall Impression: I found this entertaining, although it reminded me in some respects of the Blair Witch Project film. Certainly, with this I had a feeling from the get-go that the author of the 'diary' was going to get it sooner or later, and it would not be pleasant. Of course, that became a reality soon enough.


2) Best Part(s): "I was so shallow, using them to be popular in my group." I liked the self-deprecating manner in which the author tells much of the story; to me it adds a realistic spin - an understanding of just why he/she is in the predicament he/she's in. The visions of ghosts in different places were well-described to the extent of being very believable; I found myself enjoying the descriptions.

3) Why I Gave It The Rating I Did: The limiting factor of the first person "I'm being chased and it's only a matter of time..." tends to paint the author into a corner, and this is no different in that regard. In many ways, it is very predictable. The good news, however, is that the author still did a nice job making something fairly 'predictable' into an entertaining read. The author knows how to make a sentence interesting; as I said, a fun read.

4) Suggestion(s): I like the way you spin a tale - you are no stranger to the written word, that's for sure. I'd like to see something from you with an idea dredged from the inner depths of your imagination; my guess is you will scare the bejeebers out of some people - me included!

Thanks for sharing...



I certainly hope this was of some benefit to you. If not, come on over, read one of my items, and rip me a new one! After all: One item can produce a whole spectrum of comments; and I just love a little diversity!

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