I enjoyed this story about the character turning out to be a cannibal due to his hunger.

My favorite: The ending was the best part to me

Character: The main character was hurt physically after an accident and wasn't able to see well. No wonder he thought his wife was something to eat.

Twists and turns: I never thought that hunger would make him devour his wife

Areas for improvement:
I had to read this line a few times for me to understand it:
I blinked them open two or three time for them each time to be pulled close as if by a magnetic force
Try:
I blinked them two or three times. It felt as if my vision was being pulled by a magnetic force before it became clear.

Oh yes the other person in my we.- Oh, yes. She is another person in my 'we'.

Replace splotchyness with splotiness

I think a few words are missing in this line: So hungry this animal I don't recognise

These two sentences are connected so I suggest that you use a semi colon instead of a period
It lays there so close to the ring on my finger; the one that matches it.

Your idea was great. Keep writing.

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