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 Earth's Scorn Open in new Window. [E]
There's a price we all most pay.
by sasktoonie Author Icon
Review of Earth's Scorn  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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April 22nd is Earth Day!
When one tugs at a single thing in nature,
he finds it attached to the rest of the world.
-John Muir-


I am here to give your piece,
*Right*Earth's Scorn*Left*
a review!!




Overall Thoughts...
First of all, let me comment on the title - Perfect Fit! *Thumbsup* Also, the summary really made me curious. How exactly will you show us through your words how you think Mother Earth will exact her revenge upon us all... The scary thing is - these disasters could really come true, if they haven't already in some places around the globe. *Cry*
Normally, I would comment on the rhymes not being perfect rhymes... but they are very near rhymes, and you stuck with your pattern of adding an 's' sound on the rhyming word that follows the first. So, in a way, I really kind of liked what you did here. *Bigsmile* (soar-roars, low-knows, see-knees)

Some Suggestion/s?
I have some minor suggestions for things you should edit: (1) is the word 'most' in your summary, I think should be 'must'! And (2), after the comma in the 3rd line of the poem, the space is too big... perhaps, you double clicked the space key by mistake? *Wink*

Additional Chatter!
This poem really hit me hard... it reminded me of the devastating earthquake that hit Japan during March 2011 - the tsunami and fires and volcanic eruptions that followed after that terrible disaster. *Cry* Despite the bad memories that resurfaced while reading this, I still actually quite liked and enjoyed it - Thank you for sharing! *Smile*



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