Hi Brenpoet

My name is Ken and I'm reviewing your work "Lady In A Golden Dress"  on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
Beautiful metaphor! The poem captures the beauty of autumn and opens the readers eyes to looking at the wonder of nature beyond the obvious.

Creativity/Impact:
Very creative. The metaphorical "Lady in a Golden Dress" is so appropriate and I thought transformed the images of trees covered in autumnal colors into a wonderful flight of fantasy.

Message/Theme:
Your theme of appreciation of nature and the beauty of autumn are captured in your lyrical rhyme. You kept the tone and message consistent throughout which made for a cohesive write. I think the heart of this was nicely captured in verse 2: Some see it as a dying time,/ When the year is growing old; / I see a lady in her prime, / Wearing a dress of gold.

Technique/Technical Notes:

Grammar/Wording: You chose simple, colorful words that support both the image of a lady in a gold dress and keep the joyful tone of the whole piece. Other than your use of "proper English" - colours - I found this easy to read and could see this unfold in my mind, allowing me to join in the dance and revel in the colors and action.

Form/Flow: Written in quatrains with an alternating ABAB rhyme, the poem flowed beautifully.One of the most important aspect of making a poem flow is rhyme especially when you're using an alternating rhyme scheme. I always look to see whether the rhymes were natural and sensible or artificial and forced and whether you used "perfect rhymes" or "near rhymes." All of your rhymes were solid and supported the flow.

Poetic devices: Beyond word choice, this was a metaphorical poem comparing the colors and activity of autumn to a Lady in a Gold Dress. This was creative and worked well on many levels. Your use of alliteration (some see, she spreads, girlish green) was lightly used but still effective and the use of assonance really helped add a lyrical quality to the write.

Emotion/Imagery: This was a joyful write that opens a window to nature and allows us to expand our own vision. More than that, you can't ask.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
I found this a enjoyable read. Some say that a "five star" rating doesn't help the poet. Pushawww! It tells you that what you've created was successful and that you should keep doing what your doing! Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2014,

Ken

You responded to this review 04/22/2014 @ 12:12pm EDT

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