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 | A walk in the woods  [E] a child walks in the woods to find....  |
| (4.0)| HI war machine rocks! Welcome to WDC! Happy Earth Day!   Wow! What a moving tale! I could imagine the girl's feelings! I do not like to see trees cut down either. Your last line so effectively gives a clue to this girl's affinity for trees and her budding activist nature.  Very evocative image of "signing papers and money accepted" Having the event happen in a family scene makes it personal and through the eyes of a child even more moving.I thought of the changing landscape of child hood places--I know lots of pavement has occurred since i left our country home and tress cut down and farmlands bought up. It is very free poetry without a distinct rhythm , more story like in its line structure. I was bit confused at the beginning--walking in the woods through the grass to get there. Maybe it could be "walks to the woods.... through the grass"and then you do not need to say "make her way there" which is awkward. Period after "funnels" for pause. I enjoyed the underlying emotional potency of this piece and think it will trigger memories and hearts in us all. Thanks for sharing such a touching expression that also shows us hope that may lie in the future generation. The child has the knowing. *starstuck* Light on the path as you write on! eyestar 
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