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| (5.0)  Happy Earth Day! HI sofie. I was drawn to the cool title and the poem was so delightful! Using the animal voice as the first person narrator really worked and I think you have the inner dialogue of the rabbit well observed. The theme and style is unique to me and well woven. I like the variety of sentences, phrases, queries that add drama and action. The use of present tense draws me into the moment in time when it is happening--and keeps me alert like the animal waitign to see what will happen. You really use vivid and accurate detail as you unfold the description of the critter and its habits and how it eludes man. Certainly has a good opinion of itself and not so much of man!  Ihad to smile at it self resepct and it s shock at man's audacity to harm him. Well done!The last lines are effectvie with the Latin first --so he has class and then to make sure we all know , in case we aren't smart enough to know latin, he repeats with the common name. Very good emphatic tool. The structure is balanced and I read it aloud easily. Punctuation is purposeful too. I really saw the essence of this creature as you imagine the scene and its reaction to man's hunt.  Thanks for sharing this entertaining original and truly creative piece that is a tribute to Lepus Californicus!  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar 
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