Hi Betina Kroner .
My name is Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "Invalid Item"  and the WDC Senior Mod. Contest.
I have just read poem "Invalid Item" , which I found when looking at the Read a Newbie section of WDC and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. Please Feel free to use or disregard any or all advise.


Overall Impressions:
I got a little chuckle out of this. Sweet and funny. It also resonates with me as I love to sing my lungs out and I don't care if I am off key because I am in my car.


Form:
You have written a Haiku. Such a fun form to write.
Your first line has 5 beats
Your second line has 7 beats
Your third line has 5 beats
It follows the form... well done.


Favourite Part:
I love the image this creates in my mind. Seeing it is something I do on a regular basis I had to laugh. You capture the essence of the moment within the Haiku form. Well done.


Suggestions:
I see no grammar or spelling issues. Though I may put a capital on the first word Singing - though I am not sure if that is expected or not.


Additional Comments:
Thank you for the giggle. Please keep writing.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .