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 do not tell anyone that i love you Open in new Window. [E]
oh god they see me my eyes talk to u i will always love you
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Rawan! Welcome to Writing.com! I found your piece in the "Read a newbie" section. I feel there is some true emotion in this. The only suggestion I would give you is to correct a few grammar errors. I will rewrite your piece with the corrections that I would make. Of course, these are just suggestions:

Where are you going?
Do or Did you forget the two lovely hearts?
Like two birds of one feather.
Answer me honestly,did you forget me?

I've put the changes in bold print. As you can see, it's minor tweaks. Just punctuation and spelling.

Other than that, very nice little poem. Write on, my friend!
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