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 The Choice Open in new Window. [E]
There is no 'black and white' in choices'
by Luke A. Fitch Author Icon
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Review by Charlie ~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Luke A. Fitch Author Icon. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. My inbox is open if you have any questions or need help navigating the site. Keep in mind that the following is just the opinion of one reader. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it! If not, feel free to disregard it completely. *Sun* *Peace2*


*Tulipr**Poseyr*General Impressions*Poseyr**Tulipr*
Living in the grey area is the way to do it. Sometimes people are hard to talk to because they're so set on things being either black or white. In reality, most situations have many sides to them, so it's not as easy as saying what's right and what's wrong. I wish more people could see that and I'm glad you took on this topic.

*Tulipb**Poseyb*What Worked*Poseyb**Tulipb*
I like how you gave different examples of the black and white mindset. If someone doesn't relate to one of them, they might be able to relate to another. It's important to give different examples because the reader can pick and choose which ones work best for them. I liked the last line that summarized both of these things happening at the same time.

*Tulipp**Poseyp*Suggestions*Poseyp**Tulipp*
The random capitalization throughout the poem totally threw me off and was somewhat distracting as I was trying to read. I'm not sure why some words are capitalized and some aren't. I would suggest going through and only capitalizing the first letter of new sentences and proper nouns. Other than that, I'm not sure how I feel about the lines that start with 'Shall I give in or Should I..." To me, it seems a little weird that it goes from shall to should within the same thought.

*Tulipv**Poseyv*Summary*Poseyv**Tulipv*
Overall, I like the intention and subject matter of the poem. I think there is room for improvement on the technical side. Thanks again for sharing with us!


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