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 Between You And . . . Open in new Window. [E]
Some words about relationships - 28 Lines
by Spanky De - We Got This! Author Icon
Review by Charlie ~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Spanky De - We Got This! Author Icon. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. My inbox is open if you have any questions or need help navigating the site. Keep in mind that the following is just the opinion of one reader. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it! If not, feel free to disregard it completely. *Sun* *Peace2*


*Tulipr**Poseyr*General Impressions*Poseyr**Tulipr*
Relationships are tough, no doubt. It really does come down to compromise, which sounds so simple in retrospect, doesn't it? Your poem does a good job of exploring the various aspects of a relationship. I like the break down and analysis of situations and possible resolutions to them.

*Tulipb**Poseyb*What Worked*Poseyb**Tulipb*
There were some really great lines in here. I loved the entirety of the "Between the pain of finding ecstasy and the ecstasy of pain" stanza. I thought that was particularly well written and the word play is interesting. I like the "shelter from the storm" line because it reminds me of the Bob Dylan song. It's cool that you worked 'between' into the last stanza. It felt like a complete ending for the poem. It was ended well.

*Tulipp**Poseyp*Suggestions*Poseyp**Tulipp*
I so wish that there was uniformity of the word 'between' within the stanzas. In the beginning, there are three lines in a row that start with 'between' and I wasn't sure what to make of that at first. Once I started getting going with the next two stanzas, I definitely got into it more. I liked the every other line use of 'between', but then it switched up again in the fourth stanza. Maybe it's just my own obsessive nature with the lines, but I think it would sound more cohesive and also be aesthetically pleasing if there was consistency with that word because it is used so often in the poem.

*Tulipv**Poseyv*Summary*Poseyv**Tulipv*
Overall, I think this was a cool poem. I like the way you closed it out and the ideas within the stanzas were ones I could relate to easily. Thanks for sharing with us!


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