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 Nostalgia Open in new Window. [E]
A little poem about the presence and soul of nostalgia.
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Review by Charlie ~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello DiD Author Icon. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. My inbox is open if you have any questions or need help navigating the site. Keep in mind that the following is just the opinion of one reader. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it! If not, feel free to disregard it completely. *Sun* *Peace2*


*Tulipr**Poseyr*General Impressions*Poseyr**Tulipr*
I love the feeling of nostalgia. It's such a bittersweet sickness. I think nostalgia is an interesting thing to write about because we all experience it now and then and, when we do, we're transported back to a certain time or place. Nostalgia allows us to relive our memories over and over again.

*Tulipb**Poseyb*What Worked*Poseyb**Tulipb*
I like the way the poem started out with the children of dying autumn. It seems like something I would be nostalgic about as well. Of all the seasons, fall has the most nostalgic feel to me, with the changing colors of leaves and people enjoying the last of the nice weather before it freezes over until spring. You were able to evoke nostalgic feelings in me as a reader, which is great for a poem about nostalgia.

*Tulipp**Poseyp*Suggestions*Poseyp**Tulipp*
It looks like this might have been copy/pasted from somewhere else, so their are a few errors, like the hanging bracket in front of the second line and the a-circumflex in mother's. The beginning of the first line reads strangely. "Rainbow leaves are scattered IN my feet" sounds weird. I think 'in' might be better as 'at'. Below is misspelled in the second line.
The biggest suggestion that I have though is with the formatting of the lines. They're written as long sentences right now. I might suggest breaking them up into stanzas. For example:

Rainbow leaves are scattered in my feet,
children of the dying autumn...

Breaking it up like that will give the reader a more natural flow while they're reading.

*Tulipv**Poseyv*Summary*Poseyv**Tulipv*
Overall, I think nostalgia is a great topic to take on for a poem. I think you succeeded in evoking those feelings in the reader. My suggestions mainly have to do with formatting and typos/misspellings. Thanks for sharing!


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