Review number # 2 of week 3/12- 3/18

Hi Matthew,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: He Was Only Two

First Impression: What a inspirational way to share a young's life with us.

What I liked: How you took us for his journey by stanzas.

What needs your attention: In the stanza, where he is 7, you have used was in all the lines except one. All that he is hearing, should be for continuity all that he was hearing.

Favorite Parts: He put his country first, I respect that belief strongly. My son is a Senior Chief Petty Officer in the Navy, this is his 19th year. He believes as your young man does, country before self.

Overall Impression: I was sad, to know he did not return home to his wife and child. My heart breaks for the family. Thank you for reminding us all of the men that serve to keep us all safe.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .