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 Review #4146935 |
 | A Wedge  [13+] James again, but from a different life. Hard choices must be made.  |
| (4.0)| Hi James! Welcome to WDC from  "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Overall impression You have a way, in this story, of bringing in the cold to the reader. Although I didn't understand the relationships, or what really happened, there was cold everywhere. In the words, in the scenes, in the thoughts. Plot This read like a one scene tiny vignette, fairly sparse on meaning. I would like to know what the argument was over. Why the woman wouldn't let anyone touch her bandages. Why these people were brought together, and why they would all end up dying. Characters The characterization was strong and the dialogue was realistic. I was able to relate to Sarah's hope and request that James would stay with her. James wasn't all too pleased with his choice, or himself, but he accepted who he was and recognized his limitations. Even if there hadn't been another man involved, James might not be capable of handling any relationship. I can't say precisely what gave me that impression, other than the repeated theme of coldness everywhere.  Is James the wedge?in the end Well, you have a few characters all set and ready to go if you decide to expand on this work. Mostly, I wanted to welcome you to WdC and encourage you to keep on writing!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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