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*Sun*What a great time to find this parody of White Christmas, when it is nice a warm here. Now would be the time to sing it! *Smile* So I couldn't resist!

I had to smile when I sang! Your image of "steaming" really is evocative and drew me into your reflection of the hot day. Good hook! *Thumbsup* "isthmus" is brilliant too!

Your weaving does indeed echo the original version and your rhymes rock! I was not sure how your last three lines go with the tune. I must be missing something.

I like the idea of not giving in and not getting your wishes. It brings our mind back to the Christmas wishes. The concept of heat not having a division is neat and effective for the vision.

I noticed a typo in line 5 in verse 1: "with" should be "wish" I think. Nice alliteration here too.

This was fun to read and play with! I am not "bawling" either as there will be enough time for that when I am under a pile of snow!! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your parody stylings! Write on and keep cool! *Cool*

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