Hi Cinn , I found this piece in your port and thought I'd leave a review. I hope you'll find some of my suggestions useful!

What I liked:
It was a cute and silly story- especially when I found out the ending! It all made sense after I read it again.

General things I noticed/specific suggestions:
Maybe make the sounds italicized, like "crash", just for emphasis.
You might want to mention Moby Duck's name before you describe the painted eye- it would make it a bit easier for readers to figure out what's going on without reading the ending first!

Overall, I think this would make an excellent bath time story for kids who aren't quite old enough to bathe by themselves yet! I enjoyed reading the story- and the whole thing really drew me in. Keep writing!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .