Hello, Cinn

Thank you for sharing your work.

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I am reviewing your writing because: You are one of the featured authors for WdC Kind Hearts. And I am also working towards the Mad Dash Contest.

The tone you've set: To me this is a very dark poem. I don't think I've read such a dark poem in quite a while.

How I feel about your work: I've read your poem several times now, and I am hoping that I am wrong about it, but to me it speaks of unspeakable cruelty of someone who is supposed to be there to protect the innocence of a young girl, but who instead is like a shark and takes that innocence away.

I wonder about: the direction that this poem is taken. I hope I am wrong about it, and if I am, please help me to understand where you were going, so that I can see your point of view. If I'm not wrong, then you've touched a tender spot in my heart.

Suggestions I have: I have no suggestions for your work. It obviously was well thought out and executed. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. I really didn't expect to see any with the level of your work I am used to.

Overall: I am amazed at the way you've written this poem. It strikes a chord in me, and all I want to do is to protect this little girl and tell her it will be okay. I want to take the "shark" and skin him alive. I'm not normally a violent person, but I do draw a line with hurting children. As I said before, if I am off base with this, please let me know. The darkness in this poem is very intense. This is my opinion only.

sincerely,

amyjo

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