Hello ethalweg !

A nice nonsense poem. Can't argue with that. I like the premise. You develop Sarah's character throughout this poem and bring it to a satisfactory conclusion.

However, there are a few things that seemed a little off to me. In the first stanza she throws arrows. You don't throw arrows. Then she 'eschews' the weapons of a viking, but that's contradictory since both spears and arrows are weapons a viking might use. Stripe isn't a shape, it's a pattern.

Something that threw me a little, but wasn't an error, was the rhyming scheme. You see, if every quatrain had been ABAB or ABCB then I would have read through smoothly. But, when you present me with a mixture, I begin to see the ABCB stanzas as errors and begin searching for solutions. It's kinda distracting. :)

Thank you for sharing.

Best wishes,

Bob :D




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