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Hi ginothecat,
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tell the reader nothing about what is actually in the piece but it does speak to mystery and tension in the piece. This intrigues the reader. They will begin to read to know more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This continues with the momentum you created with the title. The reader is completely focused on the piece. They will read to the last word. You have made up a scenario in answer to a puzzle involving a crime scene description. The delighted with the suspense in both sections of the piece. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)there is a broken broom to the ground.-"to" should be "on".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.