Hi, I'm Mary Ann MCPhedran and I would like to review your story as your portfolio project Open House. I'm reviewing with river group.

First i must congratulate you on such an exciting story, and you have left your readers wondering what next. The excitement had me on the edge of my seat. Your ending was excellent and I will have to wait until next eposide to see what happens.
You have written a story that has good imagery I also like the charachters and they fit well into the storyline. The story captured my attention from the titles on your portfolio and held it all the way to the end, but I found the story a little dificult to get into at the beginning, this is no fault of you, I'm not familiar with this genre, but I continued on and I was surprised how much I liked the storyline.
I found no need for suggesting changes to the story. I look forward to reviewing and reading again. Overall a well written exciting story with good imagery. Keep writing
and keep them coming. Mary Ann MCPhedran.

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