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| (4.5)| Season's greetings, S.E. Mabson! This is really good, and I can see why it won the contest. These freaky girls are eerie, and although you don't mention them by name (you really didn't have to!), the description you gave them was great. I like how they took turns speaking (I have comedy piece about a pair of Santa's elves-Jingle and Jangle-who do the same thing), and that just adds to creepiness of them telling Mrs. Klondine how many times they stabbed their folks. Nice 'nonchalant' ending too! Sorry to be so picky, but I did spot a couple of niggles: "They would(')nt tell me much...' (wouldn't) '...covering all but their left(s) eyes.' I see that you got this in at that last minute, so I'm thinking you were rushed with this, which probably accounts for those niggles, huh? These girls remind me of those twins looking at Danny in Stephen King's The Shining! Those girls were also pretty dang freaky! Kee ponw ritin gon, congrats again, and...
HAPPY HOLIDAYS!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 12/23/2018 @ 6:37pm EST