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Hello there, Tyler Lane.
As a lover/reader/writer and judge of horror, I thought this wasn't bad for your first piece on here. I like the idea of it, but you seem to be doing a lot more telling than showing. If you're not sure what that is, check out ""Telling" Vs. "Showing" - Part 1" Open in new Window..
I'm interested to see just what that electricity really was, and it's certainly worthy of continuing. You've got a good hook here, so I hope you go with it.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Tyler, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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