Hi and thank you for sharing your story with me. What an entry a well and truly romantic version of a start to a novel, the size of the item drew my attention and reeled me in, as well as the tittle. I found I was captured and kept reading to the end.
You describe your scene well and you have me looking for more. This is a good start to writing romantic fiction. I found no grammar or spelling mistakes, but I strongly advise you reproof read as I'm no expert on punctuation.

The layout and the imagery are well displayed and the format you have chosen is well scripted and easy to read. I really think you should extend this item, it's good, and I don't usually review romantic stories, only because I can't write them. LOL. I have no preference to a favourite line because I like it all. Overall impression A great write and start to a novel, a joy to read. MARY ANN MCPHEDRAN A member of Reviewing with river.










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