Wow, much better than the first chapter and that chapter had me interested. You have your teeth real into this story and it's going well and full of excitement. You stopped at the right spot and you have me guessing, and this is good I will be coming back for more. You have penned your words well, and your romantic passion has given me goose bumps. LOL.
The structure and the design was scripted with an easy to read format and descripted with passion and good imagery.
The item has me interested and I'm wanting the next chapter to read now. The item kept my interest all the way to the end.
I found no grammar or spelling mistakes but as much as I have tried to spot mistakes don't take my word for it as I'm no expert on punctuation please reproof. I have no need to suggest changes,
You have a good imagination for this type of story and the topic and storyline blend well.
I have no favourite line I like the all of the item.
Overall a great romantic story, can't wait for more. Mary Ann MCPhedran , a member of reviewing with river.
about 200 words




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