Thank you for sharing with me your story, and I found the item an interesting read. I like the name on the street'Jack Rabit Road.
is it a real street. You have written your story in a foemat that is easy to read and you have penned the story well. I like the the continuous telling of the story and the imagery meets the criteria of the story line.


You have displayed yiur story and the break in each section give the reader the interest to carry on, I was interested all the way to the end. The story as I read was written in a descripted detailed of information and you displayed it well. Bit by bit you
structured the item.


I found no errors that I could see but as I'm not very good with grammar I suggest you reproof read. I found no need for me to suggest changes to any of the story.

I have no preffrence to a favourte line I liked it all Keep writing
and I hope to read your other stories soon.
Overall a very interesting story and a joy to read.
MARY ANN MCPHEDRAN A member of reviewing with River.






















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