GOOD written, has good description, and easy to read format, you have written a true to life storylineand just make the excuse I was passing, and sometimes your family forget, do what I do I go to the pub and join them. I enjoyed reading your item.
The item is displayed and structured with a design that is expresses the reading of the story, and you have given this here. I was attracted to the item by the tittle and the story caught my interest and held it all the way to the end.
I found no reason to suggest changes to your story
and found no errors in grammar or spelling, but please recheck as I'm not great on punctuation.

I have no preference to a special favourite as I liked all of the story with me. Overall impression a well written story with real life script, and the item displays with good expression.
MARY ANN MCPHEDRAN A member of Reviewing with River group.











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