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| Hi there, Kiernan! This isn't bad, but it feels more like an episode (for lack of a better word) rather than an actual story. Don't get me wrong; they way you told it was alright, but the ending seemed a little soft. In other words, it had that 'everybody lived happily ever after' feeling. But then again, maybe that's just me. I'm just saying that after you put that all action into it with all those characters pulling on Jodie that the ending would be a bit more climactic. Otherwise, not bad. The spelling and grammar were great, but maybe you could double space the paragraphs and use a larger font to make it easier to read? Just a suggestion... Kee ponw ritin gon, Kiernan (love that name!), and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
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