Hi Halloween the Echidna!

Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!

Overall Impression: An interesting little tirade!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to ponder:

1. In this section - (my mom is taking Millie with thank Oz) - I am thinking there needs to be a comma, possibly after "with".

2. Everything's going great, I even figured out that Millie must be a pet of some sort, but, who is Peanut Butter and why is Nemo's opinion important?

Readability: An entertaining and quick little read!

Suggestions: A little more detail in regards to the characters would be quite helpful.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina

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