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 | "Don't Take Gifts From Strangers"  [13+] Flash Fiction Challenge 19/02/20- "Pencil, ring and coat"  |
| (5.0)| Hello there, Alexis! I love dark tales, and this is certainly dark! For your very first story on here, I thought it was great, and you did an excellent job of telling it using so few words! What I like most about it (besides the idea of the ring making Pete into a 'Zombie') was the ambiguity of it. We don't who this man is, why he did this, or what his plans for Pete are. But we don't have to know, and therein likes the mystery! Well done, my friend! Great spelling and telling, but I did spot a few tiny niggles in an otherwise excellent piece (Sorry to be so picky! It's a pet peeve of mine!): "Gee(,) thanks a lot mister." "That's better(,) isn't it sonny?" The man exclaimed happily' (the) "Come along now(,) I have a lot of work for you to do." He said' (," he) Kee ponw ritin gon, Alexis, PLEASE! Welcome to WdC, and if you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-Since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.PSS-I noticed you're into horror. Perhaps you like to enter my contest "SCREAMS!!!" ? We're always looking for new contestants, and I think you'd fit right in!  Seriously!
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