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 The Runaway Open in new Window. [13+]
A poem about a criminal running away.
by SnowyOwl Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi, Snowy Owl!
I'm no exert on poetry, but I guess this is a free-verse poem, right? Regardless, considering how short this is, you did a nice job of describing this poor criminal's attempt to escape. It felt a little bumpy though, but maybe that's how you intended it to be.
One line that I questioned was
'But still he tried to leave now mark'
I'm not sure how 'now' works in this.
Anyway, not bad for your first piece on here.
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