I’m reviewing this as a "The WDC Angel Army" Angel and to thank you for all the reviews you’ve done and do on this site!
Bon jour, Sameul, and happy 15th 'birthday' on here!
This is pretty good for a prologue. I honestly didn't think I'd be too interested in something that resembled The Littles, but you actually did grab me with this. I even took your poll about what I would do if I found a 'Micro' man before I read this, and like Terra, I said I'd help him.
Heck, I'll probably check out chapter two now that I see you've got it ready and waiting!
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot a few 'tiny' (sorry about that, but I just couldn't resist! ) niggles:
'Another young woman heard the scream of the women Micro' (woman?)
“Alondra, you can’t do that!” The other woman shouted. (the)
'Terra carried the shrunken victim(,) and walked to the area of campus where a Micro village was set up. (don't need that comma)
So far, so good, Samuel!
Now let's see where you're going with this!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!
| You responded to this review 10/22/2019 @ 4:43pm EDT